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Keeper of the Dark
Maya
Strength Agility Intelligence Affiliation: Sentinel Attack Animation: 0.3
14+1.7 12+1.5 24+3.2 Damage: 42-56 Casting Animation: 0.45/1.08
Armor: 1.3 Base Attack Time: 1.7
Move speed: 280 Missile Speed: 1200
Attack range: 600 Sight Range: 1800/800


I. Model.
II. History (Masters of the dead and black magic, Necromancers who are able to truly conquer the power of the spirit are given the title of Soultaker. Unlike Sorcerers or Archmages who handle element magic, Soultakers handle black magic. Persecuted since the imperial period, many of their skills were once rendered obsolete. It was believed that those skills could not be recovered; however, instigated by the resurrection of the Archmage, a number of black magicians embarked on a journey in search of a lost vision. The handful that returned were resurrected as Soultakers)

Role: Debuffer
Side: Sentinel
Theme: Human Necromancer

Skills:

Paralyze Ability type: Active instantly paralyzes an enemy
Targeting type: Unit
Ability hotkey: R

Skills Table
Level Mana Cost Cooldown Casting range Area of Effect Duration Allowed Targets Effect
1 100 12 400 N/A 1.50 s Enemy Units Paralyze
2 115 12 400 N/A 2.00 s Enemy Units Paralyze
3 130 12 400 N/A 2.50 s Enemy Units Paralyze
4 145 12 400 N/A 3.00 s Enemy Units Paralyze


Sleep Ability type: Active instantly puts an enemy into a sleep. If the target receives a damage it wakes up
Targeting type: Unit
Ability hotkey: E

Skills Table
Level Mana Cost Cooldown Casting range Area of Effect Duration Allowed Targets Effect
1 160 15 500 N/A 2.00 s Enemy Units Sleep
2 160 15 550 N/A 3.00 s Enemy Units Sleep
3 160 15 600 N/A 4.00 s Enemy Units Sleep
4 160 15 650 N/A 5.00 s Enemy Units Sleep










Dark Myst Creates a dark fog that feasts on the vital energies
Ability type: Active of the surrounding enemy units, absorbing some
Targeting type: Instant of their hit points. It also causes them to miss
Ability hotkey: D some of their attacks lower their movement
speed, and reduces their base physical and magic
resistance.


Skills Table
Level Mana Cost Cooldown Casting range Area of Effect Duration Allowed Targets Effect
1 160 20 N/A 500 3.00 s Enemy Units Deals 60 dmg, absorbs 60 hit points, 60% miss, slows movement speed by 20% and 10 % reduction
2 160 20 N/A 500 3.00 s Enemy Units Deals 120dmg, absorbs 120 hit points, 60%miss, slows movement speed by 30% and 20% reduction
3 160 20 N/A 500 3.00 s Enemy Units Deals 180dmg, absorbs 180 hit points, 60%miss, slows movement speed by 40% and 30% reduction
4 160 20 N/A 500 3.00 s Enemy Units Deals 240dmg, absorbs 240 hit points, 60%miss, slows movement speed by 50% and 40% reduction
Notes:
-damage type: pure
-gives the exact hp amount to Maya, regardless of the hp amount targets lost

Raise Zombie
Ability type: Active Raises a zombie from a corpse.
Targeting type: Instant
Ability hotkey: Z


Skills Table
Level Mana Cost Cooldown Casting range Area of Effect Duration Allowed Targets Effect
1 100 180 900 900 Unit killed Corpse Raises a zombie with 600 hit points and 200 mp adds Transfer Pain level 1 and Brain Sap level 1
2 100 180 900 900 Unit killed Corpse Raises a zombie with 800 hit points and 400 mp adds Transfer Pain level 2 and Brain Sap level 2
3 100 180 900 900 Unit killed Corpse Raises a zombie with 1000 hit points and 600 mp adds Transfer Pain level 3 and Brain Sap level 3














Transfer Pain Transfers some of the damage dealt to Maya
Ability type: Passive to the Zombie if the Zombie is at maximum
Targeting type: N/A 900 range away from Maya.
Ability hotkey: None

Skills Table
Level Mana Cost Cooldown Casting range Area of Effect Duration Allowed Targets Effect
1 N/A N/A N/A 900 N/A N/A Transfers 40 % of the damage dealt to Maya to the Zombie
2 N/A N/A N/A 900 N/A N/A Transfers 50 % of the damage dealt to Maya to the Zombie
3 N/A N/A N/A 900 N/A N/A Transfers 60 % of the damage dealt to Maya to the Zombie


Brain Sap Feasts on the vital energies of an enemy
Ability type: Active unit, absorbing some of its hit points.
Targeting type: Unit
Ability hotkey: B

Skills Table
Level Mana Cost Cooldown Casting range Area of Effect Duration Allowed Targets Effect
1 150 20 600 N/A N/A Enemy Units Absorbs 150 hp
2 175 20 600 N/A N/A Enemy Units Absorbs 225 hp
3 200 20 600 N/A N/A Enemy Units Absorbs 300 hp

Няма картинки.Pics>all

всичко е много нагъчкано.. и да няма картинки вземи разграничи малко кое как е и т.н. то аз трябва 1 минута да се взирам във текста за да разгранича кое за какво се отнася... моля те пооправи си написаното и след това ще ти кажем вече какво мислим

Хм, аз го копирах директно от Word. Нямам идея как да го подредя сега. Относно картинките, тях ще ги мисля по-късно, а и чакам един човек да ми нарисува модела. Общо взето ще е малко сладко момиченце с модел близък до този на Cristal Maiden самонващо зомби, което прилича на Undying. А за да разберете skill table-a погледнете примерно това http://www.playdota.com/heroes/crystal-maiden - Wiki за Crystal Maiden.